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friend is considering buying a house nearby, but you have decided to leave the area due to a rise in crime. Write a letter to your friend advising them not to move into the neighbourhood. In your letter: – Recommend that your friend not go ahead with the purchase – Give the reasons behind your decision to leave – Suggest possible alternative areas that you know

Dear John, I’m writing
this
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 letter to let you know about my experience in
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Austin
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the Austin
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 district, and how I feel about
this
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 region. I'd like to urge you not to buy the house in
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Austin
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the Austin
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 region because homes in
this
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area
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is
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are
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 quite
costy
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costly
, and they do not worth the money. There
is
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are
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 no public services in
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Austin
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the Austin
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 district like, buses. I used to live in
this
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area
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, but I decided to move out
due to
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 the significant increase in crimes and violence over the past years. I had
really
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 bad experience when I got assaulted by a group of thugs in the middle of the street, and no one tried to give me a hand. I'm eager to tell you about other great
alternative
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alternatives
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. You can try
Samuel
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the Samuel
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area
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which
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, which
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 is located north of
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Austin
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the Austin
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 district. I was over the moon when I visited
this
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 place, and I saw how
freindly
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friendly
is it
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it is
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. You can find all facilities in
this
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 spectacular
area
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, and you won't find any
violence
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violent
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 activities there. Best regards, Omar

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organization
Make one idea in every paragraph.
grammar
Fix grammar and word use, like 'costly' and 'not worth the money'.
tone
Use a calm and polite tone.
vocabulary
Use short, simple words and short sentences.
spelling
Check place names and spell them correctly.
format
End with a friendly sign off.
content
You state the main idea to not buy, with a reason.
content
You offer another area as a good option.
tone
Email style with Dear and close.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • reconsider
  • unfortunate
  • incidents
  • safety concerns
  • deteriorating
  • neighborhood
  • increase in crime
  • personal experience
  • unsafe environment
  • alternatives
  • lower crime rates
  • amenities
  • community-oriented
  • recommend
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