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The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005.

The chart below gives information about car ownership in the UK from 1975 to 2005.
The line graph compares how many cars were owned in the UK between 1975 and 2005
Overall
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, owners of
the
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over two
car
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cars
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 increased
while
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 the owners of less once decreased. As the graph shows, 44 %
inhabitant
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inhabitants
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 of
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 didn’t use by car in 1975. Afterwards,
this
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 statistic declined quickly to 22% in 2005. Regarding the people who have only one car
initially
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 included 45%
citizen
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citizens
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in
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were included in
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 1975. It experienced a considerable fall to 37% in 1985. And followed a significant growth to 45% in 2005.
By contrast
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, the proprietors of 2 cars
was
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were
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 about 6% in 1975. There was a
gradually
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 increase
approximately
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to
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19% in 2005. Turning to just 4% consumers could buy 3 cars at the same time in 1975. And year by year
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this
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, this
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 quantity rises slowly to 9% in 2005.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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