Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in the city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

In today's contemporary world, people travel for different reasons. Some individuals think that
cars
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are more
convient
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convenient
to travel when travelling in the city,
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others believe that
bicycle
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a bicycle
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is the best option. I firmly believe that travelling with a bicycle is
more
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easier in the city. In
this
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essay, I will be presenting my viewpoints. To start with, urban areas are usually crowded, which makes travelling hard.
Cycles
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come as a good option for
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situations. Not only
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saves
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time,
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but also
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also it
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it also
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helps in traffic congestion and is
environmental
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friendly.
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, less number of
cars
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on the roads, less is the air pollution.Bicycles are on the cheaper side as compared to
cars
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. Many big countries are switching from
cars
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to
cycles
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.
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,
In
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India, many professionals
perfer
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prefer
going by bicycles
instead
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of
cars
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and
as a
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result
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pollution rates have declined in
couple
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a couple
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of years.
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, Cycling promotes many health benefits
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as weight loss,
healthy
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a healthy
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heart and
less
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fewer
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heart related
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heart-related
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problems. It is observed that one who
cycles
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daily is
more
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apply
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healthier than
who
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one who
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doesnot
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does not
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cycles
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cycle
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.
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, a recent survey done
by
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in
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a country shows that opting
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cycles
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for cycles
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than
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rather than
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cars
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have
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has
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benefitted
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benefited
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all age groups. Old age people are feeling more active and energetic.
To sum up
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, I would say that cycling
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both
for
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health and environmental benefits. Every country should promote using more bicycles than
cars
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.

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content
Your view is clear, but you did not show the other side well. Add more on why some may choose cars and how this view is different from yours.
language
Fix grammar and word form. For example, easier, travelling, prefer, in a couple of years.
structure
Make links between ideas stronger. Use phrases like 'on the other hand', 'in addition', 'for example', to move from one idea to the next.
content
Give more exact examples with little data or facts to make points stronger.
language
Check spelling and use simple words correctly. Some phrases are hard to read now.
structure
The essay has a clear view point and close with a summary.
content
It shows some good ideas on how bikes help health and the air.
language
There are linking words that help flow in places.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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