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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010
The map
illustrate
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 the surroundings around
City
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 Hospital had undergone a significant transformation
between2007
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between 2007
 and 2010, including the addition of a public
car
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park
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, the replacement of
bus
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 stops with a
bus
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 station, and the introduction of roundabouts
,
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.
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 The layout had
became
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become
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 more functional and convenient after the construction. In 2007,
City
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hospital
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Hospital
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 was surrounded by the Ring
Road
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, with a single
car
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park
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 on its southeast side accessible to both staff and the public through a gate. Hospital
Road
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 connected the Ring
Road
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 and
City
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Road
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, next to the
car
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park
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 on the west side. There were three
Bus
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 stations on each
sides
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side
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 of
Hospitial
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Hospital
Road
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. In 2010,the layout
had been
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was
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 restructured. A new public
car
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park
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 was constructed on the east
of
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side of
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 Ring
Road
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,
can
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and can
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get
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be
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 in via a new entrance. The Original
car
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park
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 was only available for staff at the same location. Hospital
Road
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 was replaced by two
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 and
still
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is still
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 connected
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City
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to City
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 Hospital and
City
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Road
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.
Additionally
Linking Words
, the six
bus
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 stops were replaced by a single, larger
bus
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 station located on the west
of
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side of
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 Hospital
Road
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.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, car, park, bus, road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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