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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
The two maps illustrate the
road
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 access to a
city
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 hospital in different years 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, the
road
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 access to the
city
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 hospital
is
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was
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 extended in the year 2010. The main features of
this
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 extension include the two roundabouts and a separation of
car
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the car
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 park for staff and
public
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the public
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.
Besides
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 that,
there
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they
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construct
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constructed
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 a new bus station, which makes
more
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it more
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 accessible
ways
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apply
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for people to enter the
city
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 hospital. In 2007, the
city
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 hospital was surrounded by a ring
road
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. The hospital
road
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, attached
in
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to
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 the south of the ring
road
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 with several bus stations separated on both sides of it, linked the
city
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road
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 and the
city
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 hospital. The car park for staff and
public
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the public
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 was located
in
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on
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 the east
of
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side of
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 the hospital
road
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 the entrance was
in
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on
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 the northern ring
road
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. In 2010, a new car park for the public
is
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was
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 constructed in the east of the
city
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 hospital
with
Punctuation problem
, with
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 the original one
is
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being
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 for staff only. Two roundabouts appear
in
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at
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 both the start and the end of the hospital
road
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with
Punctuation problem
, with
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 a bus station attached
on
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to
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 both of them.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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