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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
The
two
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 maps compare the variations in terms of the transport access to the
city
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 hospital in the years
of
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2007 and 2010.
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, the area was developed with the addition of a public
car
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parking
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, the replacement of bus stops and the construction of
two
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 roundabouts to improve the traffic flow. In 2007, there was a Ring
Road
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 around the
city
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 hospital. Notably, in the southeast, the
car
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park
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 was constructed for
staffs
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 and
public
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the public
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, which
located
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 between the
City
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Road
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 and the Ring
Road
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. On the left side of the
car
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park
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,
the
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Hospital
Road
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 was built, a connection with
the
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City
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Road
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 and the Ring
Road
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.
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, on
the
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both sides of the Hospital
Road
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, there were several bus stops. In 2010, the Ring
Road
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 remained unchanged,
whereas
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 in the east of it,
the
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 public
car
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park
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added
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was added
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 and the former
car
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park
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 was provided only to
staffs
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staff
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.
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,
two
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 new roundabouts were built to improve the transport.
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, the Bus Station was constructed in the west, leading to the
two
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 new roundabouts.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, city, car, road, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "improve" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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