The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
The two paragraphs illustrate how the city hospital changed from 2007 to 2010.
Overall
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,the main part of the city hospital
alomst
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almost
had not changed,
whereas
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the Hospital
RD
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, the Car
Park
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and some other parts had changed a lot. The most important change must be the transportation.
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FIrstly
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Firstly
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, the crossroad of the Ring Road and the Hospital
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RD
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Road
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in 2007
had been
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was
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changed to a roundabout in 2010,
so
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apply
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as
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and
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the crossroad between the City Road and the Hospital
RD
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.
Also
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in 2010 , a bus station
had been
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was
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established to the west of the Hospital
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RD
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Road
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,which linked the two roundabouts.
This
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had replaced the 6 Bus stops on the side of the Hospital
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RD
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Road
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in 2007. Meanwhile, the car parks had
also
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been reformed in 2010. In 2007, there was only 1 Car
park
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on the east side of the Hospital
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RD
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Road
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,
while
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this
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number had become 2 in 2010. The 2 parks had been divided for function. In 2007, the
park
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was both for the staff
an
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and
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the public,
whereas
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there was 1
park
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for the staff( the
park
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of the past ) and 1
park
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for the public( on the east side of the hospital ).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, whereas".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rd, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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