The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two paragraphs illustrate how the city hospital changed from 2007 to 2010.

Overall

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,the main part of the city hospital

alomst

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almost

had not changed,

whereas

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the Hospital

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, the Car

Park

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and some other parts had changed a lot. The most important change must be the transportation.

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FIrstly

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Firstly

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, the crossroad of the Ring Road and the Hospital

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Road

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in 2007

had been

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was

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changed to a roundabout in 2010,

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apply

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and

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the crossroad between the City Road and the Hospital

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Also

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in 2010 , a bus station

had been

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was

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established to the west of the Hospital

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Road

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,which linked the two roundabouts.

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had replaced the 6 Bus stops on the side of the Hospital

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Road

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in 2007. Meanwhile, the car parks had

also

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been reformed in 2010. In 2007, there was only 1 Car

park

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on the east side of the Hospital

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Road

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while

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this

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number had become 2 in 2010. The 2 parks had been divided for function. In 2007, the

park

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was both for the staff

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and

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the public,

whereas

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there was 1

park

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for the staff( the

park

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of the past ) and 1

park

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for the public( on the east side of the hospital ).

chunyanh502

Aug 22, 2025

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, whereas".

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rd, park with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 5 times.

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2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

199 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

accessibility
dual carriageway
roundabout
traffic flow
multi-story car park
green spaces
pedestrian provisions
footpaths
traffic signals
construction phase
ambulances
carriageway expansion
traffic congestion
pedestrian crossings
urban planning
infrastructure development

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