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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
The
two
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 maps
compares
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road
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 access to a
city
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 hospital in 2007 and 2010. In the year
of
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2007, the
city
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 hospital was surrounded by Ring
Road
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 with north-to-south Hospital
Road
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in
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to
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 the south of the hospital. Along
the
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both sides of Hospital
Road
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 stood three
bus
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 stops. An east-to-west
City
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Road
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 crossed Hospital
Road
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where
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, where
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 the furthest
bus
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 stops from the hospital were set. An exit was designed near the southeast
conrner
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corner
 of the
city
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 hospital, through which
could
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guide
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you
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to a
car
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park
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 for staff and public use.
This
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car
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park
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lay
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lies
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 on the east side of Hospital
Road
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. In comparison, in 2010,
two
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 roundabouts were added where Hospital
Road
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had
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intersection
with
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apply
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Ring
Road
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 and
City
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Road
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. The original
car
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park
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 on the east side of Hospital
Road
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 was available only for staff,
while
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 a new public
car
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park
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 was extended in the east of
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city
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the city
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hospital
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hospital,
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 where
had
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there had
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 been a free space in 2007. In
additon
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addition
, the six
bus
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 stops along Hospital
Road
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 were removed
,
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;
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instead
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instead,
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 a
bus
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 station in the west of Hospital
Road
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 was extended with
two
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 roads connected to the
two
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 roundabouts.
Overall
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, the
two
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 new areas extended for
public
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a public
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car
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park
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 in the east and for a new
bus
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 station in the southwest improved
patients
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patients'
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 convenience to go to the hospital, with
two
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 roundabouts connecting to the
bus
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 station. The hospital staff could have relatively more space to
park
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 at the same time.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, road, city, bus, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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