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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
The
two
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 maps demonstrate changes made to the
road
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 access to a
city
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 hospital between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, the main developments were the construction of
two
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roundabouts
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, the replacement of
bus
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 stops with a
bus
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 station, and the separation of staff and public parking areas, all of which appear to have improved traffic circulation and access. In 2007, the
city
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 hospital was encircled by a ring
road
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, with the hospital
road
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 providing the main route from the south via the
city
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road
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. A single car park, used by both staff and the public, was located to the east of the hospital
road
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, adjacent to a part of
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bus
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the bus
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 stops on either side of the
road
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. At that time, there were no
roundabouts
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 at the junctions connecting the hospital
road
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 to the ring
road
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 and the
city
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road
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. By 2010, significant modifications had taken place.
Two
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roundabouts
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 were constructed — one at the junction of the hospital
road
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 and the
city
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road
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 to the south, and another at the northern end of the hospital
road
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 where it meets the ring
road
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. The
bus
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 stops were replaced by a
bus
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 station situated to the west of the hospital
road
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, between the
two
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roundabouts
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, road, city, roundabouts, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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