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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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 of
points
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 scored
for
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by
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the
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apply
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teams A and
B
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and
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, and
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C
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 during 4 different years.
Overall
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, group
B
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 recorded the highest
points
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 compared to the other teams,
whereas
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 in general,
team
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B
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 was always above
team
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C
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except
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, except
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 for the year 2002
,
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;
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furthermore
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, group
C
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 fluctuated throughout the years .
To begin
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 with,
team
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B
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 in the season of 2003
,
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 experienced a large drop in
points
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 (60
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) after having 82
points
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 in 2002
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;
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furthermore
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, it dropped even more, to 42
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 in 2004,
then
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going
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went
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 up the next year to 52
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 .
Team
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 A registered 5
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 in 2002,
then
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increaced
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increased
 gradually, reaching 35
points
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 in 2004, being the 2nd to
team
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C
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 with the difference of only 8
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,
than
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then
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blummeted
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plummeted
 to 8
points
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 the next season.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words points, b, c, team with synonyms.
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