In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this ? is this a postive or a negetive development ?

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are more keen to have sessions with a personal trainer, rather than joining team-based activities or group sport classes.
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more in some countries and gives debates about the advantages and disadvantages of
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methodic. From my perspective, there are definitely some particular reasons for it, and
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for different budgets or even coaching by video lessons
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the internet. The
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related to the digitalisation and globalisation of society and the cult of productivity that was born in social media.
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results
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be better, faster, stronger,
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personalised trainings promise to give them. The third reason, related to human ego. Some individuals love attention to their persona.
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receive
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own disadvantages and can not provide
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other features. As mentioned before, some
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way as they thought more
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participation internet race of productivity cult. They focus on the goal rather
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the concept that sport or exercise
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to have a
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body.
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appear in a self-made bubble, cutting off social aspects,
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of communicating with others who have similar interests and might share experiences or tips.
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, the trend of personal trainers is a good change aimed at progress and a better understanding of own needs and capabilities, but maybe not suitable for everyone's purposes.
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, it has a lack of socialisation and less networking.

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