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This graph illustrates transport preferable for young people from 4 different countries.

This graph illustrates transport preferable for young people from 4 different countries.
This
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 graph illustrates
transport
Correct article usage
the transport
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preferable
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preferences
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for
Change preposition
of
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 young people from 4 different countries. They have several notions why they pick either a car,motorcycle or bicycle. Information shows that French civilians use a car as the majority to travel by 75%. Surprisingly, 10% of interviewers choose motorcycles as their main vehicles to travel
the
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, the
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 same as
Great Britain
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British
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 civilians.
On the other hand
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, kids from the USA pick motorcycles as their major transportation
which
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, which
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encompass
Correct subject-verb agreement
encompasses
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 30% of the graph.
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Moreover
Add a comma
Moreover,
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 automobile users in the United States are incredibly high
which
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, which
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 is 60% of the graph, the same as Great Britain
civilians
Check wording
apply
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.
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Also
Add a comma
Also,
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 English people choose bicycles as
the
Correct pronoun usage
their
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 second
favorite
Use the right word
favourite
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 way to travel, equally to
Americans
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American
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 motorbike users. Seems like the main vehicle of
Germany
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German
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 respondents is bicycles
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 contain 45% only 5% more than
auto mobile
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automobile
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 users.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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