The graphs below show the viewership of different TV programs among three different age groups.

The pie chart compares the data about various TV programmes which are watched by three different age groups.

Overall

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, among

three

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the three

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groups, watching

film

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films

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and

drama

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dramas

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the

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apply

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were

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was

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the most popular activity,

while

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news

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chanels

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channels

were used

fewer

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less

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. As the chart shows, teenagers (10-15 years old) spent most of their time

by viewing

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watching

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some

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apply

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sports and

also

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cartoons with 26%.

Whereas

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news

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chanels

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channels

were visited less willingly with only 6% in total. People between 16 to 20 years,

prefered

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preferred

to watch more drama movies (30%), rather than

news

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or animated films. Surprisingly, they watch

sport

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sports

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chanels

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channels

with only 14% and

this

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index was the lowest in

comparason

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comparison

to the other programmes. People

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apply

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the

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apply

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age

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aged

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apply

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21 or older

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apply

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hated

to watch

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watching

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some

sport

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sports

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events, as

the

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result

the

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, the

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figure was only 4%.

However

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, the percentage of

male

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males

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and

female

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females

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who watched

drama

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dramas

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cartoon

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cartoons

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and films was quite similar 22%, 20% and 21% respectively.

News

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were

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was

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the

favorite

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favourite

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TV program among people in

this

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age group

with

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, with

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a significant 33% in total.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words news with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Word repetition
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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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174 words

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The graphs below show the viewership of different TV programs among three different age groups.

Many things can influence the academic achievement and emotional growth of a student. In this regard, peers have more of an impact than teachers do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this topic?

At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.

Some people think most crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.