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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a jobb straight after school. Discuss both views.

Education
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 plays an indispensable role in everyone's
life
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 . Some individuals think that students should study at a university
level
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 to get proficiency, and a better pay by getting admission in higher institutions.
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 , others think that students should find better employment opportunities to become independent
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and to support their families. I think
people
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 should have strategic thinking to make their future brighter. One of the main reasons for having a higher
education
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 is that
people
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 can get a better understanding when they choose their field for their own
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field.
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 Each individual has a curiosity to learn about different aspects.
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 , some
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 want to become a teacher, doctor, or choose a profession as a lawyer. In
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 a case , they have to pass a lot of examinations, spend hours studying to achieve a particular position in their
life
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 , which helps to earn recognition.
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 , students are aware of the basic things at the school
level
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 , when they study different subjects, whether they are related to science, math or physical
education
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 . But when they study at a higher
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 they they realise the real meaning of
education
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 , which assists them to think critically, and provides an opportunity to get white collar
jobs
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.
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 , we all know that competition has increased
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people
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 are struggling to find a proper job in their field.
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 , in some cases, it has been seen that those individuals who are highly qualified are working in a restaurant or
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a cafe. They do not get
jobs
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 after spending time and money on
education
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 .
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 why
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people
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 think it is better to support their families at an initial stage of
life
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 .
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 ,
jobs
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 help to make
people
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 independent
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 after school, they easily find those
jobs
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 where they need some training.
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 ,
this
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 training helps to improve their interpersonal skills
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 as confidence, co-operation, and dedication
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 well.
To sum up
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 , no doubt,
education
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 plays a significant role in our
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life
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. But some
people
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 support
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university
education
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 for getting a proper knowledge of any field, and a well-paid profession,
whereas
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 others believe that secondary
level
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education
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 is enough to make one independent , and to help financially their loved ones. I think
people
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 have to make a plan where both
education
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 and employment opportunities meet
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 as doing part-time
jobs
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 , etcetera .

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planning
Plan before you write. Start with a short answer that says you will look at both views and your view.
structure
Make one idea per paragraph. The first sentence of each paragraph should be about that idea.
content
Explain how the example shows your point. Do not just state the fact.
language
Use simple, short sentences. Keep to common words so the text is easy to read.
conclusion
End with a clear conclusion that sums up both views and your view.
Task response
The essay tries to discuss both sides of the topic.
Coherence
There is a simple order of parts: intro, body, and conclusion.
Content
Some good points are given with examples.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • study
  • learn
  • college
  • university
  • degree
  • job
  • career
  • work
  • money
  • cost
  • debt
  • time
  • skill
  • practice
  • theory
  • plan
  • choice
  • option
  • advantage
  • disadvantage
  • evidence
  • example
  • result
  • success
  • path
  • route
  • after school
  • job market
  • earnings
  • salary
  • income
  • experience
  • training
  • on the job
  • trade
  • online
  • part-time
  • work and study
  • field
  • field of study
  • future
  • goal
  • independence
  • education
  • learning
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