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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Some people say that car should be banned from the centres of cities. Do you agree or disagree.

In today's scenario, there is an ongoing debate
whether
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about whether
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the
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cars should be restricted near the city centres or not. I strongly appreciate the decision to reduce the commute of the larger
vehicles
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as
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 it fosters traffic congestion and leads to pollution. Metropolitan cities are populated
and
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, and
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 the
large scale
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 allowance of
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people having mobile
vehicles
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 creates disturbance to the local people.
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, a well-planned electric public transportation system and providing cycle lanes for
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 can resolve the issue.
Morever
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Moreover
, the government
further
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 enhance the beauty of the city.
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, high air quality index near
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this
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these
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 areas
causing
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 tremendous health issues are common among people residing near
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this
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 areas.
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, the importance of having a clean city can be resolved by including air filters, planting trees and providing dump areas. Special parking infrastructure outside the town is essential for all
all
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the
fuel runned
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fuel-run
vehicles
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. In Conclusion, the usage of
vehicles
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 inside the cities increases the risks of illness and
therefore
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more
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, more
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 conventional and sustainable
method
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methods
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 of transport should be advertised.

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task
Make your view clear in the first line. Say if you agree or not and why.
structure
Add a simple plan in the intro and keep ideas in order in the next two or three paragraphs.
coherence
Use small words and link ideas with easy words like also, but, yet, so.
content
Give more real ideas that fit the point, such as how buses or bike lanes can help.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Fix words like Morever, areas, runned.
structure
Use one idea per paragraph. Separate ideas with a new paragraph.
strength
You show a clear view that cars should be less in city centres.
strength
You try to use link words to join ideas.
strength
The topic is relevant and you mention good ideas like buses and lanes.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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