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The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of adult male smokers in seven countries along with the world average in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of adult men
smokers
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 in Armenia, Egypt, Lebanon, Bangladesh, Cuba, Mexico, Australia and the world average for 2000 and 2015. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, Armenia was the country with the most male
smokers
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 in 2000 and remained the top alongside Cuba in 2015. Egypt and Lebanon were the only two countries that increased during the period given. Meanwhile, the world and other countries showed a decrease in 2015. Focusing on Armenia, the number of
smokers
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 was the highest at roughly 70% and dropped to 50% in 2015.
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, Bangladesh recorded over 60% but dramatically decreased to under 40%.
However
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, Egypt started with approximately 40% and slightly increased to 50%,
while
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 Lebanon showed over 30% and grew to 40% in 2015. The world average was over 40% and slightly dropped to over 30% in the
last
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 year. Meanwhile, Cuba had the third-highest number of male
smokers
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 at approximately 50%, and showed a slight drop in 2015. Mexico and Australia were the lowest in 2015 at roughly 20%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words smokers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart, percentage, adult male smokers
  • world average, increased, decreased
  • tobacco consumption, lung cancer
  • public health, awareness campaigns
  • government policy, smoking bans
  • health risks, nicotine, tobacco industry
  • chart analysis, data comparison
  • statistical trend, significant fluctuation
  • stagnation, steady rise, moderate fall
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