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On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter, explain What you lost How you lost it What you want the insurance company to do

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to request
you
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that you
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to
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apply
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fast-track my insurance claim process.
Few
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A few
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 days ago, I went to the Cancun Resort, where I lost my personal phone. It was a black coloured
iphone
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iPhone
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 16 Pro Max, with 256
GBs
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GB
 storage
capacity
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capacity,
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 attached with a grey leather phone case. To be specific,
while
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 I was having a
lesuire
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leisure
 time in a swimming pool with my family, I
reliased
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realised
 that my phone was missing from my pocket.
Then
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, I looked around the pool and asked
assistance
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for assistance
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 from the site management team.
However
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, we were
unble
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unable
 to locate it.
To sum up
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, I would like to request
you
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that you
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to
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apply
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kindly give your extra attention to expedite
this
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 claim process, as it will help me
to
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apply
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buy a new smartphone. I appreciate your time and consideration
to
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of
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this
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 matter. Yours
Faithfully
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faithfully
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, Ali

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task response
Add the exact date of loss, policy or claim number, and a short list of any receipts or proof you send with the claim.
coherence and cohesion
Move to clear parts. Start with what was lost, then how it happened, then what you want. Use small words and simple links like 'and', 'but', 'so', 'then'.
tone
Polite and formal tone.
content
Clear request to speed up the claim.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • valuable possession
  • insurance claim
  • misplace
  • irreplaceable
  • receipt
  • policyholder
  • reimbursement
  • coverage
  • claim number
  • deductible
  • documentation
  • authenticate
  • liability
  • premium
  • accidental loss
  • indemnity
  • beneficiary
  • contact details
  • substantiate
  • correspondence
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