The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010.

The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows changes in the share of vehicle registrations of the three most common types of commercial vehicles in the US between 1970 and 2010.
The line graph demonstrates the usage of three types of automobile
transportations
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transportation
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across the US
,
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apply
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from the years 1970 to 2010. In the
year
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1970, 5% of
residents
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used buses.
However
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,
buses
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bus
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usage faced an erratic
journey
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, reaching a roughly 15% and dropping to
a
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an
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estimated 3%.
On the other hand
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,
trucks
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endured
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have endured
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a
succesful
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successful
number of registered
residents
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, and have surpassed the
amount
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number
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of
taxis
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being used
signifcantly
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significantly
.
Taxis
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reached an estimated 25% of registered
residents
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in the
year
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1970, and have escalated by 10% of that
encoutered
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encountered
in the
year
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1970, by the
year
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2010.
In addition
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,
while
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taxis
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have escalated
signifcantly
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significantly
,
trucks
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have endured an estimated 45% of registered
residents
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,
while
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1970 was the highest
year
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with the
trucks
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registrations,
this
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slight drop
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has
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left
trucks
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as the highest vehicle registration among the graph.
Furthermore
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, in the
year
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1980
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1980,
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truck registrations
have
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apply
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faced it's first major
declination
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decline
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of 15% after a decade of it's
succesion
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succession
.
Whereas
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,
taxis
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surpassed
trucks
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in the
year
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1980, as
taxis
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have reached it's highest amount of registrations of an estimated 35%. In conclusion,
while
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the usage of three types of automobile
transportations
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transportation
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across the US, from the years 1970 to
2010
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2010,
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have
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has
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changed
signifcantly
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significantly
, it's undeniable that
trucks
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remain the most registered vehicle, and have endured a rather
succesful
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successful
journey
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,
whereas
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buses encountered a rather
erratice
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erratic
journey
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, and
taxis
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faced a rather steady
journey
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.
Overall
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,
trucks
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have surpassed the
amount
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number
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of registered
vehicels
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vehicles
within the demonstrated illustrated graph.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, residents, journey, trucks, taxis with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • vehicle registrations
  • commercial vehicles
  • share
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • patterns
  • growth
  • decline
  • advances in technology
  • economic conditions
  • government policy
  • logistics
  • transportation needs
  • industry standards
  • environmental impact
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