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The plans show the room layouts for training session for up ten people and more than ten people. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture illustrates the layouts of the room for training sessions designed for no more than 10
people
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 and for more than 10
people
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.
Overall
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, both plans contain similar facilities,
such
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 as a presenter’s chair, a whiteboard, and a section for morning tea.
However
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, the arrangement of furniture differs significantly depending on the number of participants. In Plan A, which is for fewer than ten
people
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, the seats and tables are arranged in a U-shape facing the whiteboard and the presenter’s chair. The morning tea area is located at the back of the room.
This
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 layout seems to create a more focused and direct interaction between the trainer and the trainees.
By contrast
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, Plan B is for more than ten
people
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, and the furniture is rearranged to accommodate a larger group. The tables are
organized
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organised
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 in a similar U-shape but separated into three different sections, with chairs placed around them, except for the tables on the left, which do not have chairs surrounding them. The morning tea area is moved to the corner near the entrance, leaving more space in the centre. The presenter’s chair and whiteboard remain in the same area as in Plan A, ensuring visibility for all participants.

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structure
Add a short view at the start to show what both plans are about.
content
Be sure the two plans have the same number of people in the idea and keep it steady.
coherence
Use small linking words to join ideas, like 'also', 'but', 'however'.
grammar
Fix small grammar mistakes, for example 'for not more than 10' and 'fewer than ten' stay same.
conclusion
Finish with a short end line that sums the main parts.
content
The piece makes a clear compare of the two plans.
content
It gives many exact details of the layout.
structure
The start uses 'Overall' and the idea to compare stays clear.

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