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The map below shows a civic centre between the present and its plan. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The map below shows a civic centre between the present and its plan. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
There
a
Verb problem
is a
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current and planned map of the civic centre. The
center
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centre
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 is about to face
with
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apply
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many changes. The car parks placed on the northwestern and northeastern sides are planned to transform into
cafe
Correct article usage
a cafe
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and hotel
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hotel and
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 & restaurant,
while
Linking Words
cinema
Correct article usage
the cinema
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 remains
as
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a
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 cinema. Moving to
southern
Correct article usage
the southern
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 part, the exhibition
center
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centre
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 will be replaced with
council
Correct article usage
a council
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 office, the old building of
council
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the council
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 office will be
change
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changed
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 to
the
Correct article usage
a
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 big underground library.
Moreover
Linking Words
, under the town
hall
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hall,
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 the construction of the car park is planned.
Shopping
Correct article usage
The shopping
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 centre stays as it is,
while
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 the exhibition centre moves from the large office to the compact area.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Civic centre
  • Present
  • Plan
  • Comparison
  • Main features
  • Map
  • Summarize
  • Information
  • Report
  • Relevant
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