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The charts show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
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 data regarding the total proportions of three types of nutrients in meals consumed by people during the day
which
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, which
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 might lead to
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different health conditions if eaten too much.
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,
it is clear that
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 breakfast is the most healthy,
while
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dinner
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 contains the highest amount of harmful nutrients.
it
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also
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 evident that the highest amount of
sodium
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 and saturated fat is consumed with
dinner
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,
whereas
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 added
sugar
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 is eaten mostly with snacks. Focusing first on the most and least healthy meals, breakfast contains approximately the same percentage of
sodium
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, saturated fat, and
sugar
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, between 14% and 16%. Regarding
dinner
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, it includes roughly 43% of
sodium
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, which is almost twice as much as the proportion of added
sugar
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. As for the saturated fat, it accounts for 37% unhealthy nutrients in
dinner
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. Turning to the two remaining meals, snacks have the highest proportion of added
sugar
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, 42%, which is approximately 23% higher than their proportion in lunch. The figures for saturated fat and
sodium
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 are between 21% and 14% in snacks and 26% and 29% in lunch, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words dinner, sodium, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average percentages
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • meal
  • typical meals
  • categories
  • high percentage
  • distribution
  • patterns
  • trends
  • nutrient-dense
  • data
  • comparison
  • summarize
  • reporting main features
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