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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates two possible locations, S1 and S2, for the construction of a new shopping mall in the
city
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 of Brandfield. The existing features of the
city
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 include a golf course, housing and industrial estates, a
city
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centre
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,
as well as
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 a river, road, and railway system.
Overall
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, both sites are strategically placed near the transport network, but they differ in terms of proximity to residential areas, the
city
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centre
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, and other facilities.
While
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 S1 is closer to the housing
estate
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 and
city
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centre
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, S2 is located near the industrial zone and has better access to the southern road. In detail, S1 is situated to the north, between the housing
estate
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 and the
city
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centre
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. It lies just across the river and next to the railway line, making it convenient for residents in the northern and central parts of the
city
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. Its closeness to the housing
estate
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 makes it accessible to a large number of potential shoppers.
On the other hand
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, S2 is positioned in the south-east, adjacent to the industrial
estate
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. It is located near the southern road, which could attract shoppers from outside the
city
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.
However
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, it is farther from the housing
estate
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 and golf course, meaning that residents and leisure visitors may find it less convenient compared with S1.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, centre, estate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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