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Percentage of Australian exports four countries from 1990-2012.

The line graph shows the share of Australia’s
exports
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 to
Japan
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, the United States,
China
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 and
India
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 from 1990 to 2012.
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,
exports
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 to
China
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 rose strongly and became the largest,
while
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exports
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 to
Japan
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 and the US went down.
Exports
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 to
India
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 increased after 2000 but stayed much lower than
China
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. In 1990,
Japan
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 was the biggest partner with 25%, but
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 fell to about 16% in 2002 and
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 stayed around 20% until 2012. The US started at 11%, dropped to 7% in 1995, rose again to 11% in 1999,
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 fell sharply to 4% by 2010 and remained there.
India
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 began at only 2% in 1990, stayed the same until 2000,
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 rose slowly to 9% in 2010 before falling back to 5% in 2012.
China
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also
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 started at 2% in 1990 but grew slowly until 1998. After that, it rose quickly, reaching 14% in 2007 and 29% in 2012, becoming the main export destination. In conclusion,
China
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 became Australia’s top partner,
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Japan
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 and the US declined, and
India
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 grew only slightly.

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task response
You covered all four countries and used numbers from the graph. This helps show you know the data well.
coherence
Add 1 or 2 linking ideas to show how the four parts compare to each other (for example, contrast, trend, or change).
coherence
Make links between sentences with short words like and, but, while to flow easier.
overview
Clear start with the main trend: China grows to be the top buyer.
data
The essay gives exact data for many years.
structure
Good form: intro, body, and end.

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