The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015.

The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information on the percentage of Canadians gave money to charitable organisations by age range for the years 2000 and 2015.
The bar chart presents the proportion of people who shared some of their money with charitable organisations in Canada in 2000 and 2015, divided into five different
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, Canadians aged 18 to 24 contributed the least to charitable organisations in both years. In terms of the 35 to 49
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, the percentage was the highest in 2000, at nearly 40%, but it dropped to around 34% by 2015.
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, the proportion of people aged 50 to 64 stood at nearly 35% in 2000,
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rose slightly to approximately 37% in 2015 and
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the top contributing
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in that year. The 65 and over
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saw an increase from just over 30% to 34%.
On the other hand
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, the percentage of Canadians aged 25 to 34 reached 29% before declining to exactly a quarter in 2015. Meanwhile, only 20% of youths aged 18 to 24 donated in 2000, and
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figure fell
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to 11% in 2015.
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not only had the smallest share of donors but
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the largest decline of all
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groups.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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