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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015
The graph compares how many
women
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 worked
as
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in
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 senior management in three companies ( Eldan
Ltd
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,
Bamforth
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Ltd
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 and
Finsbury
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Ltd
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 ) from 1975 to 2015.
Overall
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, these three companies experienced growth in the time period;
however
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, Eldan
Ltd
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 had the highest degree. As a graph shows, the total number of female seniors in the Eldan agency was only 3% in 1975 and 1980
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 after that, there was a rapid growth to 14% in 1985 and to 28% in 1990, respectively.
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,
this
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 figure kept rising by 2000 to 33% and by 2015 to 64%.
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, in 1975, the count of
women
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 senior employers in
Finsbury
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Ltd
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 was higher than
Bamforth
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Ltd
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 , with 16%
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 others had only 9%. In spite of
,
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this, Finsbury
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Finsbury
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 decreased to 14% in 1980, it still higher than
Bamforth
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 with just 3%.
Then
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, it continued having more
women
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 senior labourers over time . In 1985, the
Finsbury
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 was 15%, the
Bamforth
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 was 13%. In 1990,
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Finsbury
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 had 22%,
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Bamforth
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 15% and in 2000, it had still more
women
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 senior managers with 20%
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Bamforth
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 had 17%.
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, the
Bamforth
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 witnessed a rapid increase to 46%
while
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Finsbury
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 had 26% in 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, ltd, bamforth, finsbury with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapid" was used 2 times.
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