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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015
The table compares three companies,
how
Verb problem
showing how
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 many
women
Use synonyms
 worked as
senior
Fix the agreement mistake
seniors
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 from 1975 to 2015.
Overall
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, female senior managers experienced
upward
Correct article usage
an upward
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 trend with some
flunctuations
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fluctuations
one
Punctuation problem
, one
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 of
them
Correct pronoun usage
which
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. In Eldan Ltd worked only 3 percentage of
women
Use synonyms
 as senior
,
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positions, this
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this
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 figure increased considerably to 14% in 1985,
then
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 it rapidly grew to 64% in 2015. Bamforth Ltd started with 9% of
women
Use synonyms
as
Change preposition
in
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 senior
, the
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positions, the
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 number gradually climbed
approximately
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to approximately
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until
Change preposition
apply
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17% in 2000,
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this
Correct word choice
and this
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 figure sharply growth to 46% in 2015.
By contrast
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, the least number of
women
Use synonyms
 seniors were in Finsbury Ltd with 16%
then
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this
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 figure declined to 15% in 1985
,
Punctuation problem
;
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Linking Words
however
Add a comma
however,
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 it gradually
rised
Correct your spelling
rose
 to 26%
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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 between 1990 to 2015.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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