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Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends. How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people’s lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is believed that
people
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this
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these
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 days tend to follow the trend in social media
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such
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, such
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 as
global
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the global
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 fashion trend . Some
people
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types
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style
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 in dress
especially
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, especially
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 the young
because
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, because
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 they follow many
artisters
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artists
 or
youtubers
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YouTubers
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 who influence their
life
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lives
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. In my opinion , it is
negative
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a negative
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 situation
because of
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 many reasons .The most important one is that their personality
are
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do
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 not appear and they change the local
culture
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. First and foremost,
people
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 follow global fashion trends because
the
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 big
separate
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 of social media , so the young
wears
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wear
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 what the popular
youtubers
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 wear ,
that
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which
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reflex
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reflects
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 on their personality and
make
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makes
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 their
pessonality
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personality
 weak and
do not be able
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unable
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 to make
decisons
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decisions
.
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, my friend
follow
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follows
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tiktoker
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TikTok
 and used to wear the same clothes, so he can not
choose
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make
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 any
decision
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decisions
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 related to his life ,just make what the
tiktoker
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TikTok
make
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makes
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.
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, most
people
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it
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apply
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suitable for their life.
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 , the global fashion trends became
benefit
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 because it is not
influance
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influence
 very well in the
culture
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.
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very well.
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 , I have watched a
youtuber
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women
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woman
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 who gives a lot of advice about wearing
the
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apply
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clothes with
hand bags
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handbags
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 and shoes in
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way
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 ,so I follow the
way
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 that I find
it
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apply
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suitable for my
culture
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. In conclusion, the social media
influance
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influence
in
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on
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 the
way
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 that
people
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 dress
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this
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these
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 days.
In addition
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 , some
people
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 follow the same trend
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way
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apply
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without thinking,
while
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the
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apply
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other think and choose the best
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way
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way,
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depended
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depending
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 on their
culture
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 and what
make
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makes
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 their personal strong.

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planning
Plan the essay. Say your view first, then two reasons. Give one clear example for each reason.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go. Use 'and', 'but', 'however', 'for example' to connect parts.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling. Use simple sentences. Keep tense correct and use same subject.
content
There is a clear view about the topic.
example
The writer uses an example from life to show a point.
content
The topic is touched in many parts and there is an attempt to discuss both sides.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • global
  • trend
  • fashion
  • style
  • fashionable
  • influencer
  • celebrity
  • brand
  • access
  • marketing
  • popular
  • worldwide
  • connect
  • showcase
  • event
  • clothing
  • culture
  • rise
  • buy
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