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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per persion in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide emissions per persion in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
The line graph illustrates carbon dioxide emissions on average for a person from 1967 to 2007 in 4 countries
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United
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the United
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 Kingdom,
Sweden
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, Italy, and Portugal.
Overall
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, despite the sharp rises in Italy and Portugal
since
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from
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 1967
until
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to
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 2007, those of the UK and
Sweden
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 declined.
However
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, the UK depicted the highest
initially
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 and
eventially
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eventually
. Italy and Portugal had
steady
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a steady
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 incline
during
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from
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 1967 to 1997; they became stable
in
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from
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 1997 to 2007. That said, the discharging of Portugal had been lower than
those
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that
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 of Italy since the beginning:
Sweden
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 had about 1.5
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tones
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tons
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 at the start and rose to around 5.5
tone
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tons
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 in 2007, which
lower
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was lower
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 than
Italy
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Italy's
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 approximately 2
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tones
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tons
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 during that time. In
Sweden
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,
it
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there
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 was a slight increase from around 8 to 10
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tones
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tons
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 of emissions at the start
to
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of
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 1997, but
dramatically
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a dramatic
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 drop
during
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from
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 1977
until
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to
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 2007 to approximately 4.5
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tones
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tons
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 and ultimately surpassed
Sweden
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, which was the lowest of carbon dioxide emissions at the beginning.
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,
United
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the United
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KIngdom
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Kingdom
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 had steadily
decline
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declined
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 throughout the period from nearly 10.5 to almost 8
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tones
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tonnes
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. Though
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apply
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 it remained the highest among the countries.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden, tones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emissions
  • carbon
  • dioxide
  • per person
  • per capita
  • at the start
  • throughout
  • trend
  • rise
  • rise steadily
  • increase
  • grow
  • go up
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • decline
  • peak
  • reach a peak
  • fluctuate
  • vary
  • stable
  • high
  • low
  • latter
  • former
  • period
  • during
  • in the 1970s
  • in the 1990s
  • by 2007
  • in contrast
  • whereas
  • however
  • although
  • similarities
  • differences
  • compare
  • overall
  • summary
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