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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some consumers are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in their local area, rather than imported goods. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative trend?

Despite the trend of
globalization
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globalisation
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, quite a few people are preferable for regional produce over international products. A couple of factors are
atrribute
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attributed
 to
this
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 circumstance and I
bieve
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believe
 that it's positive for boosting
municipal
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the municipal
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 economy. Nearby groceries
is
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are
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 fresh and quality
guraranteed
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guaranteed
. Daily supplies
such
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 as
diary
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dairy
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, vegetables, and meat manufactured by local farmers are usually on
market
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the market
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no
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for no
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 less than a week because it doesn't need to be transported in distance.
It's
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There's
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 no need to worry if it goes bad or
close
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is close
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 to expiry.
Furthermore
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,
It's
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it's
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 possible for citizens to track the production
permmision
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permission
, production address, and ingredients as the suppliers may live in the same communities. Most seriously,
If
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if
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 a provider makes fake and inferior commodities,
whose
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their
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 reputation will become infamous very soon since the bad news always
travel
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travels
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 fast in
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the neightborhood
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neightborhood
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neighbourhood
.
Hence
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, I assume that the public can consume local merchandise without concerns.
In addition
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 to price, local products are money-effective. Without
internation
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international
 convey,
second hands
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second-hand
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 selling, and importing
avenue
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avenues
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, daily supplies are more likely
cheap
Verb problem
to be cheap
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compare
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compared
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 to
globlised
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globalised
 commodities. I reckon that folks
prefering
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preferring
 local products can
benefits
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benefit
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local
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the local
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 economy and
constructs
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construct
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 self-sufficient chains. No matter how much people around the world are deeply connected, facilitating regional yield is valid. The crowd consumes
merchandises
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merchandise
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at
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apply
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where they live
not
Punctuation problem
, not
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 only
creats
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creating
 more employment, but
also
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keeps
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keeping
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 money circulated within
this
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 district. By
producting
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producing
- delivering-consuming on a line, the municipal government is able to develop
self-supplement
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self-sufficiency
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 without
reclining
Verb problem
relying
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 on outside supplies, which somehow
contribute
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contributes
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 to
independency
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independence
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. To summarise, regional commodities are relatively fresh and high value, so city dwellers
incline
Verb problem
prefer
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it
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them
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, which is
benefical
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beneficial
 for municipal
prospect
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prospects
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.

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clarity
Make your answer more clear. State your view in the intro and keep your view in all paragraphs.
structure
Group ideas in a simple order. Use a topic sentence for each paragraph that links to your view.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar. Use common words and simple verb forms to avoid errors.
content
Give one or two clear examples to show how local goods help the town, and link them to your point.
cohesion
Use the same verb tense and linking words to join ideas.
cohesion
Use words like 'first', 'also', 'but' to link ideas.
content
The writer gives a clear view that local goods are good for the economy.
content
The idea about freshness and price is on topic.
structure
There is a basic structure: intro, body, conclusion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local economy
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable consumption
  • supporting local businesses
  • community development
  • cultural heritage
  • self-sufficiency
  • environmental sustainability
  • imported goods
  • fresh produce
  • consumer preference
  • local producers
  • organic products
  • economic impact
  • carbon emissions
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