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The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates the proportion of 6800 adults ( age 16 years and over) who
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 in various
culture
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activities
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 over the period of 12 years.
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,
it is clear that
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 younger people (16-24) were more active in any visual arts and any performance
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,
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 older adults (45-74) showed a greater preference for crafts and culture purchases. Looking at the youngest group, around 35% of those
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(
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16-24
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 took part in performances
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 as dancing, singing, playing musical
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 and acting. Visual arts were
also
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 relatively common among
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 group at 30%,
while
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 writing and
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activities
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 attracted smaller shares at 17% and 10%, respectively. Adults
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 25-44 were less active
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, with performance and crafts equally at 22%,
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others
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activities
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 stood at around 16%-17%. In the oldest ground (45-74) crafts became the leading activity at 22%, followed by cultural purchases (18%0.
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, performance and visual arts dropped to 17% and 11% respectively, and writing and
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activities
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 reached their lowest levels at only 5%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words activities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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