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The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows data on the number of Scottish aged 16 and over who took part in different cultural
activities
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 in the
last
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 12 months. It can be seen that the participation rate in different types of
culture
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 of different ages is different. The number of performers of all ages from 16 years old and up is the highest.
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, the proportion of Scots aged 16 and over engaging in
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computer bases
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computer-based
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activities
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 was found to be at its lowest during
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 period, with the exception of the 25-44
age
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group
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. In terms of
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the percentage
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 of people aged 16-24, they like performing
arts
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 and visual
arts
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 the most
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 the rates of 35.30% respectively. Next comes the writing , accounting for about 17%. The remaining cultural forms all account for about 10-11%.When we looked at the data for the 25-44
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group
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, we found that they were
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 most interested in performing
arts
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 (22%).
This
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 was followed by craft purchases
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culture
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, culture
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, cultural shopping, and visual
arts
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 at around 16 to 17%. They were less interested in writing (6%) and
computer
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activities
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 (9%). Regarding these figures, in Scotland, for the 45-74
age
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group
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, they are impressed by the
culture
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 of
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undertaking
 any crafts (22%) and they are not interested in the
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 of
computer
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activities
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, writing (5%).Performance and cultural purchases account for 17-18%.
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,
visual
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the visual
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arts
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only
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apply
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account for about 11% in
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age
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group
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.
Besides
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 that,
The
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the
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 percentage of performing
arts
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 in the 16+
age
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group
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 is 22%. They are involved in
undertacking
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undertaking
 any crafts, cultural purchases,
visual
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and visual
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arts
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respectively
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, respectively
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with
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, with
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 figures of 19%, 16%, 15%. In
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age
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group
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, they pay less attention to writing
culture
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 (7%) and
computer
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activities
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 (6%) in Scotland during
this
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 time.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, culture, computer, age, group, arts with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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