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With the rise of E-books comes the decline in paper books.Some people see this as a good steps forward while others do not.What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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 of a higher popularity of E-
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, the
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use
 of paper ones decreases.
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 essay, I will set out the principal benefits and drawbacks of
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 change.
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 trend has its advantages. First of all, it saves people money.
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 is because acquiring a monthly subscription to a reading app paves the way for a reader to access a huge number of printed publications, not just a single book.
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, its price might be the same as the cost of only one book, which means that users can save huge sums.
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, digital
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 are part and parcel of solving critical environmental issues. Making the need
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 paper and cutting trees minimal, they help to prevent deforestation and the greenhouse effect.
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, the risks of natural disasters
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, hurricanes , and tornadoes, which are able to destroy people's and
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animals'
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 habitats in just a few minutes, will become smaller.
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,
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 phenomenon has its negative sides.
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, it
influences negatively
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 readers' health
condition
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conditions
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. Spending hours in front of the screens regularly, they start
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 tension in their eyes, tiredness, and
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headache
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 will lead to the deterioration of their vision, disruption of sleep patterns, and anxiety.
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,
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over
 the
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 few decades, the proportion of people wearing glasses has increased by almost 30%, even among children.
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, with the use of electronic
books
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, it is not possible to share them with others. When users buy a monthly or annual subscription to the app, they only get
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permission to read
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instead
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 of owning them.
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 means that if you would like to broaden your horizons
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 a book, you cannot just borrow it from someone, including your family members or acquaintances
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 you will need to buy a subscription. In conclusion, I take the view that
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 E-
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 can minimise
reader's
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readers'
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 money and help to
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address
 significant environmental problems,
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also
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has
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its
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their
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 drawbacks
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such
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, such
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 as deteriorating health
condition
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conditions
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 and the absence of
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the opportunity
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 to exchange
books
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 with others.

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task response
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coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, make each paragraph hold one main idea and link ideas with simple words like first, also, but, and finally. Check spelling to keep a smooth read.
structure
The essay has an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence
There are some good linking words (First, In addition, However).
content
The topic is clear and the writer tries to discuss both sides.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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