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The table below gives information about UK independent films.

The table below gives information about UK independent films.
The table compares different types of independent films in the United Kingdom and the Republic of Ireland in 2012.
Overall
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, the number of films released in each genre did not necessarily correspond to the proportion of
income
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 from ticket sales. In terms of drama and documentary genres,
although
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 each had the highest number of releases with 35 films, their
income
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 was relatively low at just 8.3% and 2.9%, respectively.
In contrast
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, with 17.6% of releases, comedy achieved the most profitable genre, representing 45.4% of total revenue. Horror came next at 20.2% of
income
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 with 14 titles,
while
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 the biopic ranked
third,
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contributing 9.1% despite having only one film.
On the other hand
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,
income
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 from crime and action showed a smaller difference, standing at 4.7% from 7 crime movies and 4.2% from 4 action movies.
By comparison
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, romance accounted for 3.4% of releases and produced the least revenue at just 0.8%, which was slightly lower than thriller, generating 1.3% from 13 titles.

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