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The table below gives information about UK independent films.

The table below gives information about UK independent films.
The table compares different types of independent films released in 2012 in the UK and the Republic of Ireland.
Overall
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, the number of
film
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films
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 released in each genre did not necessarily correspond to the proportion of
income
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 generated from ticket sales. In terms of drama and documentary,
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 each had the highest number of
releases
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35 films, they only generated 8.3% and 2.9% of the
income
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, respectively.
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, with 17.6% of
releases
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, comedy
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 the top of the most rewarding films with 45.4% of ticket sales.
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 was followed by horror at 20.2% of the
income
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 with only 14 titles. Meanwhile, the biopic ranked third with only one movie, earning 9.1%.
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,
income
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 from crime and action showed a smaller difference, standing at 4.7% from 7
releases
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 and 4.2% from 2 movies.
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, romance accounted for 3.4 of all
releases
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 but produced the lowest revenue at just 0.8%, which
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 lower than thriller, generating 1.3% from 13 movies.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, releases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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