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The chart below gives information about European people of different age groups who went to gyms once a month or more between 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about European people of different age groups who went to gyms once a month or more between 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph below shows details about Europeans of different ages who visited gyms at least once a month from 1990 to 2010.
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, gym attendance rose in all age categories throughout the period, with young adults aged 18–24 showing the most dramatic increase,
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 people aged 45 and over remained the least likely to go to the gym. In 1990, the proportions were relatively low across all groups, with figures ranging between about 5% and 10%. The 25–34 age
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 had the highest rate, at nearly 10%.
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, by 1998 the 18–24
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 had overtaken all others, climbing sharply from just 6% in 1990 to nearly 30% and continuing to rise to about 60% by 2006, after which it levelled off. The 25–34
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also
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 experienced steady growth, reaching just above 50% in 2010,
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 it always remained slightly lower than the youngest age
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, people aged 35–44 showed more moderate increases, beginning at around 6% in 1990 and ending at about 40% in 2010. The 45+
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 consistently recorded the lowest figures, starting at around 5% and peaking at just above 20% in 2010, despite a gradual upward trend.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Age group (noun): A range of ages categorized together.
  • Gym attendance (noun): The act of visiting or using a gym.
  • Trend (noun): A general direction in which something is developing or changing.
  • Decline (verb/noun): A decrease or loss in quality, quantity, or importance.
  • Fluctuate (verb): To change continually; to move up and down.
  • Peak (noun/verb): Reach the highest point.
  • Demographics (noun): Statistical data relating to the population and particular groups within it.
  • Health awareness (noun): Being conscious or informed about health issues.
  • Fitness culture (noun): A culture that promotes physical exercise and healthy living.
  • Stabilize (verb): To make or become unlikely to change or fluctuate.
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