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The tables give information about the average hours work by part-time and full-time men and women in three countries in Europe in 2002 and compare them with the European countries.

The tables give information about the average hours work by part-time and full-time men and women in three countries in Europe in 2002 and compare them with the European countries.
The tables show the average number of
hours
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 worked by full-time and part-time male and female workers in
Greece
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, the Netherlands and the UK in 2002, with
another
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other
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European
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countries
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 included for comparison.
Overall
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,
men
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 tended to
work
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 longer
hours
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 than
women
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 in both full-time and part-time jobs.
Greece
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 had the highest figures for full-time
work
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,
while
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European
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 averages for part-time
work
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 were higher than those in the three
countries
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 given. Looking at full-time
work
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,
men
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 in
Greece
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 worked the most, with 42.5
hours
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 per week, well above the
European
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 average of 40.4. Greek
women
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also
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 recorded a high figure of 39.9
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, compared with the average of 39.2.
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, both
men
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 and
women
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 in the UK worked the fewest
hours
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 among the three
countries
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, at 37.5 and 37
respectively
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hours respectively
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. For part-time workers, the
European
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 averages were higher than in
Greece
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, the Netherlands and the UK.
Women
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 worked slightly fewer
hours
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 than
men
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 in all three
countries
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, with the highest figures in
Greece
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 (29.3 for
women
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 and 30 for
men
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). The lowest number was seen in the Netherlands, at 29.2 for
women
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 and 28.3 for
men
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, greece, european, countries, men, work, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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