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Band 4

lacke of fresh water is becoming a global issue if increasing importance what measures could be taken to overcome these problems

So
water
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 is a main source and a living need for our life,
It
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it
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 has to get a real place in our lifestyle. -
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Firstly
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Firstly,
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 we have to notice that-But now in
this
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 topic, we see that some kind
people
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 give no value to
water
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.The
lacke
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lack
 of fresh
water
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 is not a good way for our future.
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Moreover
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 there are some countries,villages that cannot even afford
for
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apply
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a cup of
water
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. This
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this
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 is called being ruthless or impolite. There are some causes for that
;
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,
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 like using
water
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 more than we need in a recipe,washing our hands or even
while
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 taking
shower
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a shower
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etc
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, etc
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. Another reason is keeping rivers,lakes or seas dirty
and
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, and
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 that actually means
a
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pollution is on the line. It causes lots of
thing
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things
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 as we see.
In
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On
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 the other hand, some sort of
people
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 are
recognizing
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recognising
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this
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 disaster and opening
couple
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a couple
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 of societies or websites
even
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, even
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 some social media accounts for it.For only keeping the
water
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 fresh,clean
and
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, and
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 to use it wisely.It
does
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actually influences the group of
people
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 using
internet
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the internet
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 and technology
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, they
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they
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who
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 join
to
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different
organizations
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organisations
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 to help out
world
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the world
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and
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, and
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 mostly to the poor countries with drought or financial
demerits
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difficulties
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. We have tons of
solution
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solutions
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 for saving
the
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apply
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water
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.
First
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The first
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 option is using the
water
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 wisely.
Second
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The second
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 option is calling
people
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 to the good path
like
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, like
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charitiesor
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charities
 the different ways that
i
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I
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told
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mentioned
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 in previous paragraphs.Another option is being kind,
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for Example
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 of donating or going abroad to help the waterless lands.
Also
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keeping
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, keeping
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clean
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apply
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the natural habitats
with
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clean with
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water
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water-related
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 related. That's one of the main problems of dehydrated
water
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.
To sum
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up
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up,
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 these tips will change you
as
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into
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 a hero
among
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in
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 the world.

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structure
Make a clear plan. Start with a short intro that says what you will talk about, then four ideas in order, then a short conclusion.
development
Use one idea per paragraph. In each paragraph, say the point, then give one example or detail.
coherence
Use simple link words to connect ideas: first, also, but, in addition.
content
Be precise about solutions. Name a few actions: save water, fix leaks, teach others, use water wisely.
language
Check grammar. Use short, clear sentences. Watch verb forms and plural.
tone
There is a real wish to help and to save water in the essay.
idea
The topic is clear and shows what is to be said.
content
There are useful points on how people can help.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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