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University students nowadays have too much freedom and do not study enough. To what extent do you agree and disagree? Explain your opinion, using specific reasons and examples.

The way people view university education has changed drastically in the past few years.
Universities
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 make sure
students
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 have enough time for leisure activities rather than blindly sticking to
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their
 curriculum. It is important that
students
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 with different innate talents and skills
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 supported during
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their
 academic journey. Yet,
students
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 spending so much free time and not spending time
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 academics
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 sparked debate among people. My perspective
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 is discussed in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
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, university does not necessarily have to be just about academics, it can promote other
activites
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activities
 like sports and arts.
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,
universities
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 have robotic clubs, science clubs,
arts
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and arts
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 clubs to support
students
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 with different talent
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.
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, many famous
universities
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 like Harvard and Oxford admit
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 based on
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their
 performance in sports and arts and not just academic performance.
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, it is important that all the
students
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 with varying skill sets feel welcomed in
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 and
universities
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.
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, having too much freedom may have negative impacts as well.
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, if there is no
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supervision
 from the tutors or parents,
students
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 will deviate from
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their
 paths, say it is academics or other activities. They might end up doing drugs or get addicted to
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alcohol
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say
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se
. Evidently,
students
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 should have enough freedom to make choices about what they need to do with
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thier
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their
 life
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 it has to be well looked after by the authorities and families.
To conclude
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, I agree to an
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 that
students
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 should have
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thier
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their
 choice to learn and do what they want in
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their
 life
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however
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, professors should supervise these choices to guide them on the right track. Having
such
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easiness
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ease
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 would definitely help the
students
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 to take the pressure off of them and become a valuable member of the
socitey
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society
.

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content
State your view clearly in the first line and keep to it. Do not drift from your main idea.
content
Use two or three main ideas and support them with easy, true examples. Avoid untrue facts.
language
Check spell and word mistakes such as their, alcohol, supervision. Small errors hurt flow.
structure
The essay has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence
There are linking words like firstly and secondly to show order.
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