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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen?What are the consequences of this situation?

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advancement
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 of technology, many workers choose
the
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apply
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job
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jobs
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which
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for which
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 they don't have
talent
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the talent
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for
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.
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this
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 essay will examine the main reasons behind
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 trend and discuss its potential consequences. One major reason is that people usually
chose
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choose
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high revenue
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high-revenue
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carrers
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careers
 when they
seeking
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are seeking
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 job opportunities.
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, in
Taiwan
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Taiwan,
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 numerous
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students prefer
select
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to select
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 computer science and electrical engineering as their major, because
the
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experts
of
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in
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 those
area
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areas
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 can earn higher salaries. Another salient reason is that
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apply
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 some
parent
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parents
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 hope their children
fellow
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follow
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 their
expectation
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expectations
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,
hecnce
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hence
 some kids would study some subjects they
deisliking
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dislike
.
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 situation can lead to several negative consequences. On a personal level, employees would
loss
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lose
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 their motivation
during
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while
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 working, because they focus on one thing they
disfavor
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dislike
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everyday
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every day
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. It might make some
mantal
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mental
 problems, if individuals undergo
this
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 kind of stress. For
social
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the social
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 level, if people tend to work in the same area in order to earn more money, the
coutries
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countries
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of
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diversity
of
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in
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company
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companies
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. It might make
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the ecnomic
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ecnomic
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economic
 system
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at
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th
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risk, when specific works become
old-fasion
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old-fashioned
. To
summarize
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summarise
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, there are many reasons
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fincial
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financial
 situation,
parents
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parents'
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expection
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expectations
, and social reputation
influence
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that influence
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learner
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learners
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 working in not
suitable
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unsuitable
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carrer
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career
.
However
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,
this
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 often results in negative outcomes for both individuals and society

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planning
Plan your essay with a clear view at the start. Use one main idea in each paragraph.
language
Use simple and correct words. Check spelling and grammar so your meaning is clear.
structure
Begin each paragraph with a clear topic sentence. Use easy linking words like also, and, but to show how ideas go one after the other.
evidence
Give more real examples and explain them simply so the point is strong.
conclusion
End with a short conclusion that restates the main idea and gives a final thought.
structure
The essay has an intro, body and ending, so the plan is clear.
ideas
It shows some good ideas on why people choose work they do not like.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dread
  • passion
  • inherent talent
  • fufilling
  • career
  • job
  • fulfilled
  • unhappy
  • unsatisfied
  • work-life balance
  • burnout
  • stress
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • self-esteem
  • emotional well-being
  • potential
  • achieve
  • success
  • personal growth
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