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Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand, what measurements can governments and individuals take to respong to this problem?

Nowadays, there
are
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have been
much
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many
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 discussions surrounding the
limited
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limitations
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 of fresh
water
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resource
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resources
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. Some people hold the view that the
developing
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development
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 of the worldwide demand
about
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for
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 fresh
water
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 is becoming a big problem. There are
serveral
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several
 reasons why the
increasing
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increase
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 in demand and how to solve
this
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 problem
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, which
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 will be explained in
this
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 essay. There are some reasons why the demand
about
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for
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 clean
water
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of
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among
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 people
becomes
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 more and more popular. The first reason is
the
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 development of
life
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standard
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standards
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 today is higher than
the
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 past
one
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apply
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. People in the
morden
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modern
 use
water
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 in every work daily,
such
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 as personally,

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planning
Plan before you write. Make a small plan to show why water use grows and what to do.
coherence
Put one clear idea in the first part and stay with it in the rest.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show order and cause, e.g., first, next, then, finally.
grammar
Keep sentences short and clear. Use common words only.
vocabulary
Check word form and spelling. Use common words for accuracy.
content
The topic is usual and you touch on both causes and fixes.
structure
Your idea is there, and you begin to talk about the issue.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • limited resource
  • global problem
  • population growth
  • industrial expansion
  • agricultural activities
  • urbanization
  • water conservation policies
  • water-saving technologies
  • infrastructure
  • wastewater treatment
  • recycling
  • public awareness campaigns
  • water conservation
  • mindful use
  • domestic use
  • sanitation
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