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Writing Samples
Band 2

High school should allow the students to study the courses that the students wanted to study.” Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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 not agree with
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 reason why am I disagree with
this
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 topic is
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that when
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the
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apply
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student
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students
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 only study the
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courses
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courses,
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 they
can'
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can't
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t
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 develop
they self
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themselves
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 to make a better life. If they only choose what they want and don'
t
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 want
choose
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to choose
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 risk or try other
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courses
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courses,
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 they doesn'
t
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 like it can'
t
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 make they develop. They must try another
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courses
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course
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 that they
not
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have not
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 even
try
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tried
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, if they have
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tried
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 all
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the courses
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courses
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courses,
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 they must have a
self development
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self-development
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 class and
guide
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guidance
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 from
teacher
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a teacher
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 to help the
student
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 choose or think
what
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about what
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 major
that
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they want. But if they had
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chosen
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 the
major
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major,
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 they still must study the
courses
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 that they want and the important
courses
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 like
mathematic
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mathematics
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,
english
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, local language,
an
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and
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 history. The Important things that
They
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they
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 need
is
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are
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 guidance and direction from
teacher
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the teacher
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 and
they
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their
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parent's
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parents
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.
Student
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 and teacher must
have
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apply
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a
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apply
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collaboration
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collaborate
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 to
make
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help
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 the
student
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 develop
to
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into
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a
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apply
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good things.

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task response
Plan your essay first. Write a short list of ideas you want to say.
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State your view clearly in the first part and stay with it in the rest.
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Give one or two simple reasons and use small examples.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words to show how your ideas fit together (for example, first, also, but, so).
language use
Keep sentences short. Check grammar and spell words well.
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Clear view on the topic is shown.
coherence cohesion
There are some link ideas that help the flow.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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