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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think that these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

In my part of the world,
crime
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novel
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novels
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 and television
crime
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drama
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dramas
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 have become increasingly popular forms of entertainment.
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 rise in popularity can be
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 across all age
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groups
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 and social
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, suggesting a white spread appeal.
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 essay will discuss the reason for
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 trend and present my opinion on
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crime related
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 media.
Firstly
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, people are more interested in crimes
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 the previous cases that often occur in society
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such
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, such
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 as
robbing
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 and murder.
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 might lead the content of various media, novels,
tv
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 shows, and
youtube
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YouTube
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 to portray each significant case to attract attention and views.
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, many
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, doing
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podcasts,
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 illustrate murder cases. These cases are complicated and have interesting points to do the
story telling
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storytelling
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.
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, writers love to write novels or screenplays based on true stories, since they receive more engagement.
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, The Conjuring,
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 thriller
movies
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movie
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 that
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 inspired
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true
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a true
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 story in the United States. These kind of
story
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stories
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 plays with people's minds, the sense of
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 and exited in the movies gain the attention of the people. From my perspective, Horror or Thriller content
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 my heart beat fast.
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, there is another side of the coin, overconsumption of illegal action might affect the mental
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 of consumers, overthinking and
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nightmares
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.
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Furthermore
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 it could cause misconduct
behavior
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behaviour
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, especially with
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minor
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minors
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.
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, there is a risk of repetitive actions from minors
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 are still not able to identify which action is proper to follow.
To sum up
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,
crime
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 novel fiction and
crime
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 drama are more popular because they are inspired by real events. I strongly believe that
crime
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novel
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novels
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 and drama can be valuable when consumed thoughtfully and in moderation. I highly recommend viewers to focus on
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 quality of production, rather than those relying on violence or shock value.

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structure
Plan your essay with three parts: intro, body, and conclusion. State your view in the intro and restate it in the end.
language
Fix word errors and use clear phrasing. Use simple, correct words. For example, say 'wide spread' not 'white spread', and 'these kinds of stories' instead of 'these kind of story'.
content
Give one or two good examples that link to your point and to your view. Do not use facts that are not clear.
coherence
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Use linking words to show how ideas go from one to the next.
content
The writer gives a clear view and keeps it in the end.
structure
Use of sign posts like Firstly and To sum up helps the reader follow the idea.
content
An idea on how crime media may affect us.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • phenomenon
  • intrigue
  • enigma
  • compelling
  • addictive
  • chilling
  • forensics
  • procedural
  • thriller
  • suspense
  • psychological
  • criminalistics
  • deviant
  • intricate
  • red herrings
  • misdirection
  • sardonically
  • socioeconomic
  • catharsis
  • moral ambiguity
  • multidimensional
  • protagonist
  • antagonist
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