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The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicyle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the reasons why people travel to work by bicyle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie graph
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demonstrates
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 various reasons why
people
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 commute to
work
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 by bicycle or by car.
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, health and fitness and less pollution were the most popular reasons that
people
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 chose to cycle to
work
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. It can
also
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 be seen that
people
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 mainly drive to
work
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 because of its level of comfort
as well as
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distance
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the distance
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.
Firstly
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, the percentage of cycling to
work
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 for exercise, health and environmental benefits
occupy
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occupies
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 30%, which was the highest amongst other purposes.
In contrast
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, the figures for the other reasons
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such
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, such
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 as no parking issues, free of charge and faster than
driving
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driving,
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 were more or less the same at the lowest, from 12% to 15% respectively.
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, the proportion of commuters driving to their workplace in order to enjoy comfort and save more distance accounts for 40% and 21%
respectively
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respectively,
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 as they are the two most popular factors. It is
noticable
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noticeable
 that the same percentage of individuals who feel that going by car is faster and easier to carry things show the same figures by 14.
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, the reason
people
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 think driving to
work
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 is safer than cycling is the least common one.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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