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Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Today , most
people
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 themselves stuck in
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a discussion
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 of whether
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 urban
areas
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 or rural
areas
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 are better places to spend their
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life
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lives
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.Both cities
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 and
countryside
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the countryside
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 have their own advantages and disadvantages, but
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the decision
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 to choose where to live depends on a lot of factors . In the following passages ,
i
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I
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 will discuss both sides of
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the picture
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 and will give my view on it too. First , let's discuss some of
important
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the important
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 features about why
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humans found crowded towns as a valuable place to pass their
existance
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existence
. One of the major
factor
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factors
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 behind
this
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 decision is more
opportunity
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opportunities
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. Urban
areas
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offers
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offer
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 more
opportunity
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opportunities
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 than
country sides
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the countryside
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 for
its
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their
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 huge
buidlings
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buildings
 and
more
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larger
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 population .
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 , one of my
friend
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friends
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 named Atif shifted from his
village
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 to a new township in order to get a better job .
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 opportunity , the Other premium reason behind considering urban
life
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,
as
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that
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standard
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the standard
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 of living is
better
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a better
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 lifestyle . Metropolitan
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has
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much
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a much
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 better lifestyle in comparison to
domestic
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rural
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areas
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due to
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 better
facilties
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facilities
. For
exmaple
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example
,one of my very close
companion
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companions
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 and his family migrated to
islamabad
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Islamabad
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 city , the capital of Pakistan
in
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 search of better education . To
conlude
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conclude
, in order to live a memorable
life
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 ,
municipilaty
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municipal
life
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 is
people
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's finest choice .
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 , Rural
life
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 is
also
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public's
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the public's
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 primary choice to devote their breathing . Let's have a look
on
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at
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 some of the key aspects behind
such
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a decison
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decison
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decision
. First and foremost cause is
peaceful
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a peaceful
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life
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 .
Village
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life
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have
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serene
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a serene
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 , calm and composed
life
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 in comparison to
much
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the much
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 crowded
citylife
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city life
. Let's take an
exmaple
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example
 of my relative who migrated back to
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village
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the village
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 from
city
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the city
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 for a meaningful melodic
life
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 .
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 to
peaceful
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a peaceful
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life
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 , the other astonishing reason is farming . Rural
life
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 has a lot more to offer in
field
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the field
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 of agriculture rather than well-equipped
budlings
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buildings
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 of cities . In short ,
village
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life
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 has a lot of key motives which push
people
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 to choose
this
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 kind of living. To
summarize
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summarise
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,
Few
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few
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people
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 consider township
life
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 as
favourite
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a favourite
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to
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place to
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 spend
theri
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their
life
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 ,
in contrast
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 , some consider
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apply
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pastoral
life
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 as
better
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a better
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 option . If
i
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I
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 have to choose
on
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one
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 of these ,
i
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I
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 will definitely go for Urban
life
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due to
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 its everlasting
benfits
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benefits
.

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grammar
Work on basic grammar and spell words carefully.
structure
Make each paragraph focus on one idea and link it clearly to the next.
content
Give more examples that match your point and explain how they show it.
vocabulary
Check common spell mistakes and use the simplest correct form.
strength
The essay shows both sides and has a final opinion.
strength
There are real life examples to back up points.
structure
There is a clear start and finish in the writing.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cultural amenities
  • public services
  • rural lifestyle
  • community cohesion
  • tranquility
  • environmental benefits
  • career advancement
  • social fabric
  • proximity to nature
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