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You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write an email to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email: Give details of the purchase Describe the problem Explain why you need a replacement urgently

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request a replacement of a clothing item that I recently purchased from your online store. I ordered a medium-sized evening gown
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 navy blue
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. The dress was named "Nightlife" on the website. I placed the order during your summer sales, which allowed me to benefit from a 30% discount on the regular price.
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 I appreciated the
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 shipping, the item presented more issues than I would expect from a luxury brand. Upon unboxing the package, my attention was immediately
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 to the tag, which indicated that the dress was two sizes larger than requested.
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, the back zipper was completely broken.
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 to see considering how expensive the dress is. That said, I would be grateful for a swift replacement of the gown, as I bought it to wear at a gala happening in two weeks.
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 is quite an inconvenience for me because I spent most of my monthly income on
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 purchase, leaving me with not enough to look for alternative options in local stores. I would appreciate your immediate attention to
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 issue. Yours faithfully, Ketsia Mbaku

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organization
Use a clear three paragraph layout: opening that states the reason, a body with the problem, and a closing with the request and a note of urgency.
grammar
Fix spelling and form: change 'dissappointing' to 'disappointing', 'expedite shipping' to 'expedited shipping', 'two weeks gala' to 'a gala in two weeks'.
content
Be precise with what you want. State if you want a replacement or a refund, and ask how you will send the item back.
tone
Keep a polite tone. Avoid too much personal talk about money; add the order number and item code for quick reply.
lexical
Use simple words and short lines. Do not use long phrases or many big words. It helps to be clear and fast to read.
task response
The letter gives clear proof of the problem: wrong size tag and a broken zipper.
timing
The letter states a real date when the event is due (two weeks for the gala).
tone
The letter stays polite and formal.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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