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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

There is no denying the fact that the best way to communicate is speaking.
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 it is a commonly held belief that speaking a foreign
language
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 outside your country could
make
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pose
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 crucial social and practical issues, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that learning a new
language
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 provides tremendous benefits in
people
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's lives.
This
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To begin
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 with, staying in overseas countries away from your region could cause some communication problems. One of these issues is social problems because of
misunderstanding
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.
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, participation in social activities becomes difficult
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,
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especially in everyday life.
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,
people
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unable
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are unable
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 to build relationships with other
people
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, which is essential in
human’s
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human
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 life.
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, if
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people
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 had barriers to interact with the other party, they wouldn't have met their partners or made a family. Another point to consider
that
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 speaking strange languages ​​in varied locations in the world that are totally unlike your native speaking results in several advantages. One benefit is learning a new
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, which
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people
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's work opportunities. It is
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 possible to say that if you know many languages, many companies will hire you.
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 of
this
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, your career will
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 and
improve
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 a lot.
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,
people
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 who know different languages ​​will have many friendships. In
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conclusion
, despite
people
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 having different views, I believe that it is very important these days to master more than one
language
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 in order to practice socially and practically with others.

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weakness
State your view clearly in the first line and keep it through the essay. Add one strong point with an example.
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Make links between ideas in a simple way. Use small, clear sentences to move from one idea to the next.
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Tell more on how you feel about living in a country with a new language and give more clear proof for your view.
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Avoid long and hard phrasing. Use short, simple words.
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Add a real small example to show how language helps work or life.
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Some good idea on how language can help work and friends.
structure
There is a plan with intro, body, and ending.
thesis
The writer shows a clear view that learning a language can have good parts.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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