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The illustration below shows the proportion of people living in different types of houses in three different areas in 2012 in Denmark.

The table presents data on the percentage of residents living in four types of housing across three areas of Denmark in 2012.
Overall
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, Green Park was dominated by flats,
while
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 detached
houses
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 were the most common in the Central area, and semi-detached housing was the main choice in Southberg. In the Central area, only 15% of people lived in apartments.
This
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 figure rose slightly to 18% for terraced
houses
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 and
then
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 increased
further
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 to 28% for semi-detached homes,
while
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 detached
houses
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 had the highest share at 39%.
In contrast
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, Green Park showed a very different trend. Flats accounted for as much as 76% of residents, after which the figure dropped sharply to 14% for terraced homes. Semi-detached and detached housing were
least
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the least
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 popular, both at just 5%. Southberg displayed a mixed pattern. Around 25% of people lived in flats,
while
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 more than half (56%) occupied semi-detached
houses
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, the highest proportion in
this
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 area. Detached
houses
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 represented 14%, and terraced homes accounted for only 5%.

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task
Start with a clear view of the whole table. Say what is common for all areas and what is not. Give the four types in each area when you can.
coherence
Use easy links. Put ideas in a line so the writing flows. Compare areas to show a trend.
task
Keep to the numbers. When you give a fact, write the exact percent from the table.
coherence
Make one idea in each paragraph. Let the reading go from one area to the next with calm pace.
overview
Clear view of the main patterns in each area
data
Good use of data with many numbers
structure
Clear order of ideas and flow
terminology
Names stay the same for house types
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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