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The plans below show how an office building was converted to a dental clinic. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two layouts give a breakdown of how an
office
Use synonyms
 structure was converted to a dental clinic.
Overall
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,
while
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 the recent buildings
remain
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retain
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 the same structure, there were added new facilities
.
Verb problem
have been added.
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 In the old
office
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, the reception
located
Verb problem
was located
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 on the left-hand
side
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 of the entrance,
there
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and there
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 was a storage on the opposite
side
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. Next to the reception,
office
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 workers
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 able to have a
food
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meal
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,
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apply
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 in the kitchen.
Moreover
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, there were three main offices, the first one was placed on the east
side
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 of the kitchen, the second workplace was in the middle of the building,
while
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 the third was
took place
Verb problem
located
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 on the southeast edge. Behind
the
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apply
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office
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 2, there was a small room, a toilet.
north-east
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The north-east
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side
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 was free for open co-working. Redeveloped structure shows
,
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 that there were added new opportunities for dental treatment.
While
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 the reception had remained in the same place, storage was made smaller in size, and
toilet
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the toilet
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 was removed
to
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from
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 that plan. Sterilisation took place in the toilet and the plan of open and room offices, and kitchen, placed four treatment rooms.

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content
Use one clear plan: first say what stays, then say what is added.
structure
Group ideas in a steady way so the text walks from old to new with good links.
grammar
Be exact with rooms and places, and fix wrong words about up or down.
language
Use small and easy words, and short sentences so the text is easy to read.
content
You show both old and new plans and some care to compare them.
content
There are details about rooms and where things go.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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