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Modern technology is now very common in most places. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

In today`s fast-paced world, advanced technology is very
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common
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at
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 all
the
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apply
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places. It has changed the way of living and
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made
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 modern work very easy and reliable. In my opinion, there is no
any
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major drawback
of
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to
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 depending highly on current advancements
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 with,
modernization
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modernisation
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 has changed the way of
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operations
 at
workplace
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the workplace
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 and industries.
Due to
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this
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, people are
relaying
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relying
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 on
computer
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computers
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 nowadays compared to
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the past
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 few decades, where notes and
records
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record
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 books
was
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were
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 in use.
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, banking
has now
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now has
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 high
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dependence
 on advanced
softwere
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software
, tablets and
internet
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the internet
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,
while
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 in
20th
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the 20th
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century
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century,
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 banking was based on
records
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record
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 books and physical passbooks.
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, there was
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research done by Western Sydney University which says robotics and AI
made
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have made
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 human life very easy
at
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in
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retail
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the retail
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 and space
sector
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sectors
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,
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;
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 in
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the past
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past
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past,
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 it was so hard to perform
oprations
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operations
 in
this
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 field. In my view, there are very less
disadvantges
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disadvantages
 of new technology, but the
benifits
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benefits
 are more to
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the use
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 of
devloped tecniques
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developed techniques
.
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,
develpments
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developments
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are
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 more when everyone
started
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starts
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 using new tools,
it
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which
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 leads to development and
make
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makes
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humans
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human
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 efforts very less. New products make life
more easy
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easier
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, so people are likely to save their valuable time.
Furthermore
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, there are very less drawbacks of using new things
such
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 as
laptop
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laptops
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 and
phone
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phones
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, which
is
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are
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 proven
addictive
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to be addictive
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 for
human
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the human
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 brain, and increased screen time can damage eyes. Modern
euipments
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equipment
 needs power
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;
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 if
electricity
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the electricity
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is cut-down
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cut-down
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cut down
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 may
can
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affect
neatively
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negatively
.
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, there was an article in The Times of India which mentioned
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that new
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 technology is
more easy
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easier
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 to operate and the drawbacks are minimal. In conclusion, advancements
made
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have made
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 work life
more smooth
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smoother
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 and mankind can
relay
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rely
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 on the new methods. In my opinion, there are few
only
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drawbacks and
higher
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a higher
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 success rate of modern developments.

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task response
State a clear view in the intro and keep it through the essay. Try to balance by noting both good and bad points.
task response
coherence
language
structure
There is a clear intro and a conclusion.
coherence
You use linking words to show how ideas connect.
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