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The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie graphs show the nutritional consistency of two dinners. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
The pie charts compare the nutritions were consisted in
medium
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a medium
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 baked potato and macaroni
including
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, including
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carbohydrat
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carbohydrates
, protein,
glocose
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glucose
, saturated fat, and other
nutrients
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.
Overall
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, the vast majority of two meals
is
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are
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carbohydrat
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carbohydrates
.
In addition
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, saturated fat accounted for the lowest figure in medium baked potato,
while
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 in
macaroni
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macaroni,
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 other
nutrients
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 were
.
Correct word choice
higher.
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 In Macaroni,
carbonhydrates
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carbohydrates
 made up over
one fifth
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one-fifth
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 of the meal.
Besides
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, the
percentage
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 of saturated fat was exactly 21%, doubling the figure for protein and glucose with 11%. A very small fraction of
meal
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the meal
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 was other
nutrients
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. Turning to
medium
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a medium
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 baked potato, the huge
propotion
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proportion
also
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 was
carbonhydrates
Correct your spelling
carbohydrates
, with 35%. And the second biggest
percentage
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 was protein with one quarter
percentage
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, which
doubling
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doubled
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 the figure for saturated fat (10%).
Additionally
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, the
percentage
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 of
glocose
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glucose
 took up 15%,
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similarly
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similar
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with
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to
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 other
nutrients
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words nutrients, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutritional consistency
  • carbohydrates
  • proteins
  • fats
  • vitamins
  • minerals
  • fiber
  • proportion
  • component
  • pie graph
  • comparison
  • significant
  • balance
  • healthy
  • dietary choices
  • implications
  • absent
  • presence
  • macro-nutrients
  • micro-nutrients
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