The following chart illustrates the information about players of electronic games in South Korea in 2003.

The pie chart provides the data on players of video

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in South Korea in 2003.

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, males made up the majority of gamers and Action

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were chosen more in general. As the graphs show, men overcame women in terms of playing different genres of it, with 72% and 28% respectively.

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, South Korean players who were over 36 years, played less , with only 23% in total,

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teenagers who were under 18 years old preferred to play more(39%).

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, only 7% of Korean gamers chose to play

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such

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as Education and Role play, with 6% who chose to enjoy other types. Meanwhile, Action

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were the most popular type of

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with a significant 43% in total. Playing

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which is related to cars and racing wasn't as widespread as Action, with just 17%.

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, sports

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were quite popular in that area

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20% in 2003.

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The following chart illustrates the information about players of electronic games in South Korea in 2003.

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