Students should pay full cost for their own study, because university education benfits indivuduals rather than society. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Many people believe that students should cover the full cost of their
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because the benefits of a university degree are mostly personal rather than societal. I fully agree with
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statement, as higher
education
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provides individuals with greater career opportunities and social recognition.
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, investing in
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significantly improves a person’s future prospects. A university degree equips students with
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knowledge and practical skills, which in turn increases their chances of securing well-paid jobs in reputable companies.
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, recent studies in my country have shown that graduates who have invested heavily in their
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are more likely to be employed in leading firms and enjoy financial stability. In
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sense, the advantages of
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are primarily enjoyed by individuals rather than the wider society.
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, individuals with strong academic backgrounds often gain higher status and respect within their communities. An educated person is usually able to make wiser decisions in difficult situations and act as a role model for others. In workplaces, employers tend to reward employees with advanced qualifications by offering them better positions and opportunities for promotion.
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,
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not only enhances an individual’s professional success but
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elevates their social standing. In conclusion,
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society
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benefits to some extent from an educated population, the personal gains are far more significant.
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reason, I believe that students should bear the full cost of their university studies, as the rewards they receive are mainly individual.

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task
State your view clearly in one sentence at the start and keep it in every paragraph.
task
Include some idea on how the cost to a student may affect society, not just one person.
support
Add more real facts or numbers to back up points.
language
Fix small mistakes in spelling and grammar.
coherence
Link ideas between paragraphs with clear phrases like 'in addition' or 'furthermore'.
clarity
Clear stance on the issue.
structure
Well ordered structure with introduction, body and conclusion.
coherence
Good use of 'Firstly' and 'Secondly' to mark ideas.
closing
Conclusion restates the view.
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