some people think that men and women have different qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agreee or disagree?

Some individuals think that some
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jobs
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better
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are better
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acceptable for
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men
,
other
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others
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for women.
On
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my opinion, that works should not should not be divided into groups by sex, for reasons which
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will outline in the following essay. The works which more suitable for different
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is
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a full stereotype
which grew
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through
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years
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.
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, in the past
women
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, women
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can
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not get a job in general,
due to
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the patriahat
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patriahat
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patriarchal
system.
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This
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reasons made
some
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apply
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of
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certain
jobs
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be
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more
natral
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natural
for women, like as seamstress.
Secondly
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, some works which have
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for
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a
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ladies
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also
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have more female workers.
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, men
always can
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get
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education, because of that they can be different prestigious persons like
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doctors, teachers and
judge
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judges
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.
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of the stereotypes, which in the future will make gender divisions.
On the other hand
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, for now it
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does not
metter
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matter
which genre
are you
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you are
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,
persons
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people
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can work in
differend
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different
jobs
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and break stereotypes for that, showing examples
how
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to defeat
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system. Nowadays, a lot of judges, doctors and teachers are
womens
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women
,
for
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instance,
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me
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my
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mom businesswoman and she equals other
mans
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men
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, my aunt
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very famous doctor. In conclusion,
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want to say that in our time we should specify
jobs
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by the genre or think that one
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suitable than
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the other
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. Our century is a century of equality
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everyone can be anyone, and sex does not matter.

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task response
Make your view clear in the intro and keep it in all body parts.
structure
Plan the essay: 1 idea per paragraph, with one short intro and short end.
task response
Many ideas are not shown well. Add more strong points that prove your view.
grammar
Use simple and short sentences so you can be easy to read.
stance
You take a clear view against the idea that jobs must fit by sex.
content
There are signs of use of both past and today as reason.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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