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Some people say that art can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can be only made by those with special abilities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Art
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 has been an essential part of most
people
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's lives, as it can be created by any individual in various forms.
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 some
people
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 argue that only the talented can produce fine
art
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, I believe that even the most ordinary ones can
portrait
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art
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 as well. On the one hand, it is true that, in the past, only the ones that are praised by the
expertise
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experts
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 are the ones can be called
art
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. Even though it is extremely unfair to those unknown artists who lived in the shadow, almost all the well-known
masterpeices
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masterpieces
 were created by those famous and "gifted" artists.
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 phenomenon existed because the professionals only
recognized
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 those work, which
were
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was
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 sold at unbelievably high prices,
an
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as
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art
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,
while
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 only
few
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a few
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people
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 actually understood the value.
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 the other hand, I believe true
art
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 lives among normal
people
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.
Art
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 acts as a
mean
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means
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 of expressing one's feelings, thoughts, and their vision;
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, it should not be defined simply as good or bad, or whether it is worthy enough to be seen as
art
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. A family picture
draw
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drawn
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 by a young kid can be priceless for the family members, strengthening the bond between them regardless of the quality or the skills. In conclusion,
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 highly-praised artworks are more
highly-recognized
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, from my point of view, the worth of any form of
art
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 should be defined by the viewers and it
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is defenitely
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defenitely
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definitely
 not
the
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a
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previlege
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privilege
 just for the talented artists.

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structure
Plan your essay better: say first what you think, then tell the two views, then give your own view in one clear end.
content
Give more clear and simple examples for each view, like a street art scene or a kid drawing at home, and explain why it shows that view.
language
Fix small grammar errors and use simple words. Check 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand', and use 'drawn' not 'draw' for past tense.
idea
The essay tries to show both sides and give a view.
content
There is a real life example in the text (family picture).
structure
Intro and end are there.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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