Some people think that spending a lot on holding wedding parties, birthday parties and other celebrations is just a waste of money. Others, however, think that these are necessary for individuals and the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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requiring extensive financial support, many
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believe that it is a waste of
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others see it as a necessity for both individuals and
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society.
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celebrations
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are important as a
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to be connected with
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and friends,
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enormous spending
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represents financial illiteracy and should be rationally controlled.
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and birthday parties are less about personal accomplishments and more about family recognition and support. These events usually aim not just to mark a life achievement, but rather to celebrate and spend
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time with close
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to stay in touch with family members, commonly known
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societies as a "tradition".
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, in Kazakhstan, weddings are not only an event to celebrate the beginning of a new family, but
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to get acquainted with
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from both sides and to meet with distant relatives.
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, many
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believe that the celebration is an opportunity to demonstrate the financial state of
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. They spend enormous amounts of
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just to create a false image of financial stability by borrowing loans from banks.
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tendency should definitely be eliminated
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it has already been accomplished by young individuals.
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, many couples have stopped
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extravagant wedding ceremonies in expensive restaurants
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their homes
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more
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have started to acquire financial literacy but not
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money
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on unnecessary impressions. In conclusion,
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celebrations
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should be continued because it is a great
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to stay in touch with
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by sharing pleasurable memories with
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ones, I fairly believe that a tradition of spending high amounts of
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should be abolished because it may demonstrate an inaccurate image of wealth.

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structure
Plan your answer with 2 or 3 clear ideas in each paragraph and say your view in the intro and again in the conclusion.
coherence
Use simple links to show how one idea leads to the next.
examples
Explain each example a bit and show how it backs your view.
grammar
Check for small grammar and word use mistakes.
task response
The writer shows a clear view on both sides and gives a straight opinion.
coherence
The order of the parts is easy to follow.
example
An example from life is used (Kazakhstan).

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • extravagant
  • frivolous
  • lavish
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • consumerism
  • unrealistic
  • social bonds
  • milestones
  • local businesses
  • celebrate
  • memorable
  • nostalgic
  • cherish
  • community
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