Many aspects of the way people dress today are influenced by global fashion trends. How has global fashion become such a strong influence on people’s lives? Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Fashion
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trends
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are always
being
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around people these days, especially teenagers. Keeping up with
fashion
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trend
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is like two sides of a coin, it would be great for human
being
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beings
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and
also
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bad for them.
Initially
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,
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discuss
about
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the positive impact
about
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fashion
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trends
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. In
this
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modern era,
fashion
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is one of the most noticeable
aspect
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aspects
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that
could
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can be
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easily seen by people, it might help our first impression
to
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them.
For instance
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say we're a lawyer meeting our client at
certain
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a certain
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place, we don't want to dress
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ourselves
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with
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in
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streetwear
clothes
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, just because
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afraid to miss the
fashion
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trend that has been going on at that time, so
then
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our
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would easily
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just based on our rebel look.
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, we have to match the
clothes
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with the occasion that we are facing. For
this
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case, we have to wear a suit or tuxedo to meet our client aiming for
the
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great first impression. Moving on to the opposite view for
this
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case, as I said earlier,
fashion
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trends
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also
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has
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some negative impacts
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such
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, such
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as
:
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apply
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eliminates
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the norm of garments in some countries to keep up with
fashion
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trends
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, forgetting the traditional clothing, and many more. To make it clear,
lets
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take
some
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example. In Indonesia,
fashion
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trends
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are
on
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at
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its
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their
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peak at the moment. These days, a lot of
indonesians
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Indonesians
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wear something crazy to catch up with
fashion
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trend
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, we
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. We
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may see some casual style, sporty, classy, and even crazy demon style
clothes
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. For context, Indonesia has a strict tradition about wearing something. Especially to a woman. Women
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to cover all of
her
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upper body with their
clothes
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, so if you wear
a
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too open
clothes
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, that's considered not respecting the
surrounding
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surroundings
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.
To sum up
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,
fashion
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trends
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will always bring us two sides of
impacts
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impact
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. We just have to dress up wisely, wear
clothes
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that
suitable
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are suitable
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with
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for
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its
ocassion
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occasion
. We just have to respect the
norm
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norms
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that apply in certain countries.

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task response
Plan your writing. Start with a clear idea. State whether you think global fashion is good, bad, or both. Then give two or three reasons and one small example. End with a short wrap up.
structure
Make a plan before you write. Each paragraph should have one main idea. Use a topic sentence at the start of each paragraph.
grammar
Fix grammar and word use. Watch for 'lets' vs 'let's', 'ourself' vs 'ourselves', 'trust's' and similar errors. Use simple, clear words.
cohesion
Use linking words to join ideas: 'first', 'also', 'but', 'however', 'for example'.
content
Give clear examples from life or real current trends you know.
editing
Check spelling and punctuation. Use big letters for proper nouns.
content balance
You show two sides to the issue, not just one.
examples
You use an example from life (a lawyer meeting a client) to show a point.
conclusion
There is a closing line that sums up your idea.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • influence
  • global
  • trend
  • fashion
  • style
  • fashionable
  • influencer
  • celebrity
  • brand
  • access
  • marketing
  • popular
  • worldwide
  • connect
  • showcase
  • event
  • clothing
  • culture
  • rise
  • buy
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