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The maps below show part of village in 1910, and the same part of that village in 2010.

The maps below show part of village in 1910, and the same part of that village in 2010.
The map illustrates the look of the village in 1910, and how many constructions were built until 2010.
Overall
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, the changes included the building of new houses and the changing of some buildings
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 other designs weren’t reconstructed until 2010.
To begin
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 with, the views of the village in 1910 on the entrance of the village were the residence and the post office. And both of them are located opposite each other. In the middle of the school line on the left was a butcher. After that, the end of
this
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 way was
School
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the School
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 and to the right across the high avenue , which was situated just two houses to the right.
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, at the Northern end of the high boulevard was a Large building surrounded by a green zone.
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 under these were grocer, baker and apartment.
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, there was the London lane without any construction.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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